Social Security Announces $967 Year-End Check for Retirees
1. Overuse of Promotional Content
The article includes “Promoted Content” sections in between relevant sections about Social Security benefits. These seem out of place, as they distract from the main focus. To make the content more coherent and human-like, it would be better to eliminate or relocate the promotional elements. If you want to keep them, they should be in a designated section at the end of the article, so readers are not interrupted while trying to read informative content.
2. Clarity and Flow
Some sentences are a bit unclear or awkwardly phrased, for example:
- “December is right here. Said another way, Social Security also takes beneficiary welfare into account.”
- This could be simplified to something like: “With December upon us, Social Security is also ensuring that beneficiaries are taken care of during the holiday season.”
- “SSA divides beneficiaries into two groups based on the start date of benefits.”
- This could be clarified: “The SSA categorizes beneficiaries based on when they began receiving benefits, which affects when they receive payments.”
3. Confusing Terminology
Terms like “disbarment date” seem incorrect in this context. It’s likely that you meant to say “disbursement date” instead. Be sure to use the right terminology to ensure accuracy.
4. Excessive Details About Payment Schedule
The explanation of the SSA’s payment schedule is informative but can be simplified. The chart showing payment intervals based on birth dates could be summarized in one or two sentences rather than a table, for example:
- “Social Security payments are scheduled based on your birth date. For example, those born between the 1st and 10th of the month receive payments on the second Wednesday.”
5. Removing Redundancy
There are sections where the same points are repeated unnecessarily. For instance, the article states multiple times that SSI beneficiaries will get the $947 check, and that payments are adjusted when they fall on weekends or holidays. Streamlining this information would improve readability.
6. Formatting for Readability
Break the article into smaller paragraphs, as some sections are too long, making them difficult to follow. Use bullet points or numbered lists for important information like eligibility criteria or the steps to apply for SSI benefits.
7. Overuse of Complex Sentences
Some sentences are overly complex or wordy. For example:
- “If SSA’s payments fall on a weekend or holiday, they are rescheduled.”
- Could be simplified to: “If payments fall on a weekend or holiday, the SSA reschedules them.”
8. More Engaging Language
Human-generated content tends to be more engaging and conversational. Instead of focusing on formal language, try to address the reader directly and make the tone more friendly, e.g., “Here’s everything you need to know about your Social Security check this holiday season.”
9. Proofreading for Grammar and Punctuation
Some grammar and punctuation issues need attention. For instance, there are unnecessary capitalizations (“First” and “SSA”), and the structure of the sentences could be improved for smoother flow.
Revised Excerpt Example
Here’s an example of how you could rewrite a portion to sound more human-generated:
“As December arrives, Social Security is preparing a special gift for retirees: a $967 check to help them ring in the New Year. This payment is part of the annual adjustments made to ensure beneficiaries are supported throughout the holidays. If you’re a Supplemental Security Income (SSI) recipient, this check will be sent out on December 31st, providing much-needed assistance during the season. But what if you’re not currently receiving benefits? There are steps you can take to apply and see if you qualify for future payments. Read on to learn how!
